WORST WRITINGS: PART THREE

Last one for Guardians 1. (I started rewriting it and it’s *somehow* worse??? So we get to go through that!)

Cover your eyes and let’s go!


 

Percy and Jodi had been swimming for quite a while when  they noticed a small hut up ahead- about 20 yards. 

“Look! A hut! Maybe we can hide there!” Jodi exclaimed.

“What if it’s a trap?” Percy frowned.

“It won’t hurt to check it out.” They started swimming towards the hut when…

“ACKKKKKKKK!!!!” Percy let out a blood curdling scream. 

A shark had grabbed hold of Percy’s tail. Blood seeped into the water in red waves.

“PERCY?!” Jodi yelled frantically.  All of the sudden, a large Killer whale whizzed by her and started attacking the shark. The Orca opened its huge mouth and quickly swallowed the shark. The piercing sound of a whistle sounded from below them. A merman, probably in his thirties, was standing in the doorway of the little hut and motioning for them to come inside the hut.

Can orcas survive in tropical waters? *researches* surprisingly, yes?? 

“You, boy, come inside, the sharks will surround you if you don’t get indoors.” The man addressed Percy. “You too, girl.” Jodi and Percy swam inside the hut. The hut was small, but roomy at the same time. There was a bed, a table, a chair, and a dresser. There was one small window next to the door. There was a braided seaweed rug on the floor. The man eased Percy into the chair and started bandaging his tail. 

“What are you? Crazy? What were you doing swimming in the Shark Sea?! It’s dangerous! You’re lucky you didn’t lose your tail!” The man scolded Percy.

“We were just… Running from the queen.” Percy explained.

“You mean Cleopatra?!” The man asked. “I should have known.”

“What do you mean?” Jodi asked. 

“I’m afraid I have some explaining to do.” The man said with a sigh. “I am Victor. Cleo’s husband.”

Yeah explain everything in the second chapter. Good going, Beck. 

“Wait what?! But you’re dead!” Jodi said in a confused tone.

“Surprise?” Victor smiled weakly.

“We were told you were dead. The Guardians killed you!” Percy exclaimed.

“I will explain. You see, I was, in fact killed by the Guardians. Although I was brought back to life by Salamaindan.” Victor went to his closet and brought out some bandages.

“Saladin.” Jodi corrected.

“Yes right. Saladin. Anyways, he told me I would be spared. Why he spared me I do not know.” Victor said.

“Were you evil? The queen was evil. Why did you marry Cleopatra?” Jodi asked.

“My dear confused child. I was not quite aware of her evil until it was too late. She told me of her plan to turn all mermen into humans. She pleaded with me to help her. Of course, being my soft self, I agreed to help her with her notorious plan. Unfortunately, the Guardians caught me and accidentally killed me. Cleo was furious and made a promise to kill the Guardians. I guess it’s to repay them for what they did.” Victor told them, wrapping Percy’s tail with the bandages.

“Why didn’t you go back and tell the queen you were alive?” Percy questioned.

“I didn’t think the queen was quite ready for me to announce my surviving yet. She was in a terrible state of health and mind. I was planning on telling her soon.” Victor said.

I think knowing you were ALIVE would help her more??? Just a thought. 

“She’s your wife. She deserves to know everything. You should go back right now and tell her.” Jodi ordered.

“I suppose you’re right. Thank you dearly children for your help. I wish you best of luck escaping Cleo. I shall try and convince her to leave you two alone. So long children!” Victor turned and swam quickly out of his hut, hopped on his orca, and dashed off towards the palace.

Hides from his wife for twenty years, meets two teens, and runs back to his (angry) wife. 

“Wow.” Jodi said with surprise. “ I guess he really loved her. I mean, he wanted to make sure she had recovered fully before came back. I wish someone would love me like that.” Jodi looked wistfully at the sea floor.

“Um yeah…” Percy felt blush creeping up his cheeks as he looked in the other direction.

“What’s the matter? Is something wrong?” Concern filled Jodi’s voice.

“Oh nothing. Nothing at all. Everything’s just great. You’re fine. I mean, I’m fine..” Percy stuttered nervously.

“Oh. Um ok. Good.” Jodi looked sadly off into the sea.

sssOOOOO roooooomANNnnTIiic

“Let’s get going. Maybe we can find the Guardians and ask them for help.” Percy suggested.

“Yeah……let’s go…” Jodi replied with a miserable look on her face.

 With that, they swam off towards the Deep Kingdom.

***

“I LOST THEM AGAIN!” The queen raged. Cleopatra swam angrily around her elaborate bedroom. She finally gave up and flopped on her bed. Her new Seaweed A La Chic comforter shone with thousands of green sparkles. She threw a book across the room. It hit her Seashell and Summer Scents candle collection. The candles fell to the floor and shattered. 

“NOOOOOO! My collection!” The queen fell back onto her silk and goose feather pillows. 

“Everything! They ruin everything! They’ve ruined my life and taken everything I love!” The queen sobbed.

“Not quite everything, Cleo.” A voice said calmly from the doorway.

A man of about thirty entered her room. He had short, brown hair and green eyes. He came over to her and took her hands in his.

“It’s been quite a while hasn’t it my darling?” the man said.

“AHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!” The queen screamed in terror. She grabbed her scepter and hit him over the head with it a couple times. After she finished the beatdown, she threw a chair at him. His tail got stuck in the chair and he tried to get it out.

“Not quite the welcome I was expecting, but it’ll do.” The strange man rubbed his head gingerly.

“VICTOR?!” Cleopatra squealed with a look of shock on her face.

“Hello dear. I’m terribly sorry for interrupting your mental breakdown, but I came to tell you I was alive.” Victor said apologetically.

“What? How? When?” The queen was at a loss for words. Which rarely ever happens. 

“Allow me to explain.” Victor sighed and said, “Well, I’m alive again.”

“WHAAAAATTT? THEY KILLED YOU! At least I thought they did.”

“Um… they did kill me… then brought me back to life. They thought I was someone else.”

“How did they bring you back” And why?”

“I’m not entirely sure. They have had some reason for that. I’m trying to figure it out. Make yourself comfortable. I’ll tell you everything. This will take a while.” 

“hey girl I just wanted to know I’ve been alive for twenty years and let you suffer and rage and DESTROY people’s lives and I’m just coming now because I met a sixteen year old girl. You wanna make out?”

***

“Ok so we have to land softly this time, CATAMARAN.” Echo reminded.

“Yeah yeah yeah whatever.” Catamaran rolled his eyes. The Guardians and Alanna were traveling somewhere. Catamaran and Saladin wouldn’t tell Alanna or Echo. The sound of a screech, wail, and many moans told Alanna that… “Ouch! What a hard landing. Catamaran?!” She shot a look at the cat who was sheepishly grooming himself. 

“Whaaaat?! You don’t have any broken bones, do you?” He replied.

“Well… no?” Alanna admitted.

“Guys, where are we?” Echo asked.

“We are at the Guardian’s Cave!” Saladin replied excitedly.

***

    They entered the cave carefully, following Saladin through the thick tangled seaweed guarding the entrance of the shadowy cave. Echo’s dark fur blended into the shadows as they entered the small, cramped cave. Catamaran slid over to a basin in the middle of the cave, beckoned Saladin with the wave of his paw, and mumbled a few words to Echo. They stuck their paws into the middle of the fancy engraved, quartz basin. They mumbled a few words and Saladin exploded into a fiery ball of fire, Echo disappeared, and Catamaran was suddenly surrounded by a small cloud flashing lightning and spitting jets of scalding hot water. Suddenly everything changed. The cramped cave suddenly had a wide hole where the basin had been and the water around the hole was suddenly a freezing cold. Saladin swam into the hole first, then Echo and Catamaran. Alanna hesitated, unsure what to expect until Catamaran beckoned her to follow with his tail. When they soon got to the end of the long musty tunnel, they came to a large, spacious room. There were pillows all over the sandy floor on Alanna’s left, and a small tinkling in the corner told Alanna that there was a chime made of purple and blue seashells. In front of the pillows was a large underwater fire warming up the room. Around the fire, thin swirls of hot water laced into the small drain at the top of the room. Catamaran bounded over to a long gritty counter and a door. He opened the door and out flooded four frightened fish with their scales flashing in the firelight. Catamaran closed the door and caught them one by one, and handed a fish to each Saladin, Echo, and Alanna. He kept one for himself. They started eating the metallic, mushy, raw fish until Saladin sensed Alanna wasn’t eating. He went over, put a paw on her fish and his paw lit up with fire until the fish was cooked. 


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13 thoughts on “WORST WRITINGS: PART THREE

  1. R A I N says:

    Okay so FIRST OF ALL…It was ANYTHING BUT “worst” OKAYYY!? 😘😘😘❤️😍❤️❤️❤️ I LOOVEEDD IT! But there is such a lack of context here for me! I mean, you mentioned it’s part 3? So I am going to have to read the first two as well and I am looking forward to it! AND IS IT A FANFICTION? Since the guy’s name is Percy then is it for the uhh..series with Percy in it? God I have forgotten the name!

    BUT HEYYYY!! I DIDNT KNOW YOU WROTE STORIES AS WELLLL!’ WELL DONE HON! 😍😍❤️❤️❤️💕💕😱😱😘😘😘. LOVED IT! And your little commentaries in between! 🤣🤣❤️

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    • Beck @ SMELLFOY CAN READ says:

      Ahhhh ty! 💚

      Fanfiction for Percy Jackson? No I just named him Percy because I loooved Percy Weasley (still do) (even though he was a major jerk)

      ahahahah thank you! I LOVE writing and actually, I have to write a TWO page short story for school and I am dyING because there’s no way to cram everything into two pages? I’m at four pages and counting and I’m gonna FAILLL x |

      Thank you again!!💜

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  2. Emma @ AFCTL says:

    I LOVED THIS SO MUCH!!!! Worst? Pfft! Lies, I tell you! All lies!
    I have gone through and read all your parts again with this post and I am loving them all!
    (PS. Your commentary is superb!)
    Can’t wait to see what you write next.
    Quick question: are you on Wattpad or other writing pages too? Would love to follow you if you are 🙂
    – Emma

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